Chasing The Scent: My Girlfriend Found Out!
After one year of dating, Barry Burton (aged 33) finally agrees to let his loyal, loving and utterly gorgeous girlfriend, Stacy Ryder (aged 30), officially move in with him. But Barry is hiding something from his busty and curvy girlfriend: he’s an Adult Baby Boy!
Stacy, who has no idea of her boyfriend’s most intimate secret and fetish, begins to snoop round her new home. Within moments Stacy notices a familiar baby scent within the house and she quickly finds her boyfriend’s secret stash of Adult Baby stuff.
After a deep honest discussion between them both, Barry’s relationship and bond with his girlfriend will never be the same again, for she’s going to make sure she’ll control everything in his life from now on as she now becomes Barry’s new Yummy Mummy…
7 Chapters • Over 11,200 words
Amazon USA – 2nd September 2018 – 1 Star Review.
J. F. Sebastian
Another un-sexy dud. – So, I foolishly gave the author’s work another chance. Unfortunately, it’s the same amateur writing as the last one, and the story isn’t interesting. The first few pages seem to be the author ranting through their character.
One again, the dialogue is all punctuated with “I adverbially verbed”, the way a student in creative writing class might do when they’re told about alternatives to “he/she said”; they apply too much colour and it ends up reading as really tacky and distracting.
If this were a student work it would be drenched in red pen, there’s so many mistakes and style problems.
“Since we first been (sic) courting”
“Men who had bravery (sic) told”
“Peado” (even the British don’t spell it this way)
“”I’m drinking that!” I sternly protested” – lines like these are so bad they’re meme-worthy. This gave me a good chuckle but, again, there’s nothing exciting here.
Once you finally get past all that, the story is just boring and not believable. The girlfriend finds his secret then immediately gets 100% into it? Yeah right.
The dialogue and characterization are flat and dull.
Amazon USA – 29th July 2018 – 4 Star Review.
Pretty good. – I would have given it 5 stars if not for some annoying grammatical errors. So few of these stories involve ABDL men and sex. Let’s hear it for Jodie Delight for having the audacity to make erotica erotic.
Amazon UK – 31st July 2018 – 5 Star Review.
A pleasant read. – Another good tale from Jodie. Looking forward to book 50. Thanks Pug.